Please pick apart my build

A lot of the builds I have made for PvP have been either cheesy, sloppy, or just not really that good. And when my friends duel, I'm always left a little empty handed. So I'm working on a more respectable build, one that can proudly show it's face in the hard (and laggy) world of Lordran. So please, feel free to pick apart and suggest new things for this build. http://mmdks.com/2ygr. The weapons there are not my only options, and I plan to use a variety of weapons. I just used the heaviest setup I plan to fight with.

Thanks in advance! 

Solid build stats wise, change your armour to get more poise, hollow soldier waist cloth and knight gauntlets will get you started.

Numbers seem fine to me. Very similar to my quality build. I can't comment on the armor though, not my expertise. Why the round shield? That is a pretty crappy shield.

Rawr, grab 53 poise.

I'd go for 30 Faith and SLB if you're going to be Forest Hunting. You're really close to some serious buff damage and you can chew dose gankers up with a SLB falchion or some such.

http://mugenmonkey.com/darksouls/?c=163042586359760016

this pretty much sums up the suggestions here, it has 53 poise (a 'break point' which allows you to not be stunned by a decent number of attack types), the magic/miracle booster crown, and sunlight blade buff for your weapons at the cost of 80 hp and 1 point in str, but if you really want to use the murakumo then id say just take another point off hp instead of str like i did.

http://mmdks.com/2ylw
I applied a lot of the suggestions here, but as for SLB, I dislike using buffs in duels. It kind of sucks the fun out of the game for me. I was thinking I could run 16 faith and use force and replenishment, since I kind of just want WotG for it's utility in setting up combos and force could probably do that just as well.