Any advice for improving this?

http://tinyurl.com/bp7ecrm

my first prototype for my new character. attempting to make a somewhat competitive build for a change. any thoughts/tips would be much appreciated!

If you change your starting class to Bandit, you'll save 6 souls (you'll be at 114 given the numbers you have). Your HP is way too low. You can be one-shotted by some heavier weapons. Your second spell should be Darkmoon Blade or WoG.

HP is WAY too low

try this,it's closer to what I did with my first Sunlight build, except you have no attunement hardly lol http://tinyurl.com/86dnd8f

Okay, go bandit and Up the Vit to 27.
cant use DMB because I will be in another covenant.
WoG is probably a good call too. thanks.
(also thank you for fixing the URL, will do that in future)
and possibly going with the bandit I might only have SLB

Kinda depressing that I can improve or equal every single defence by using DWGR.

I would change the Cloranthy Ring for fap ring. Feed on Green Blossoms.

Yeah that could work nicely, didnt think of using Favour and protection since I usually avoid it. (hate the whole breaking thing in general but okay If I'm using for a PvP toon)
did want blossom and the ring but realistically I dont need all of that regen.
Changing original post to reflect new setup.
Basic setup is there Looks ugly as anything but plays rather nicely
Thanks for the help everyone!