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by Wade_Wilson Mon Jul 09, 2012 10:32 pm

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Post by Wade_Wilson Mon Jul 09, 2012 10:32 pm

WhatDoesThePendantDo? wrote:On the subject, read your assrape account. The HIV bit was funny, if a little edgy. Perhaps too edgy. And Fluttershy sure must be one desperate gal, to fall for anyone who shares her avian fetish, eh?

Also, it was decent though too much on the short side, I believe you could have developed the sentencing portion of the story better. It seemed as though Celestia just wanted to sentence somepony to a gangbang no matter the offense. I believe you could have done more with that.

All in all, it's a 7 out of 10 for me. I'll make sure to check out the rest.

7/10 isn't bad for a short that was written completely as a joke, but cheers.

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Post by WhatDoesThePendantDo? Tue Jul 10, 2012 12:37 pm

http://pastebin.com/C9Xmwrws

Amazed at the professionalism here. Very few grammatical errors and no spelling errors that I saw. A great start indeed. Funny, lively, and well-paced. Just not sure why the Anon has to be so vulgar-tongued in his (her?) first encounter with the Mane 6. Sure he's (she's?) surely shocked and confused, but that was probably uncalled for.

Then again, who's to say how I would react were I transformed into a pony...

9/10.

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Post by Wade_Wilson Tue Jul 10, 2012 3:58 pm

WhatDoesThePendantDo? wrote:http://pastebin.com/C9Xmwrws

Amazed at the professionalism here. Very few grammatical errors and no spelling errors that I saw. A great start indeed. Funny, lively, and well-paced. Just not sure why the Anon has to be so vulgar-tongued in his (her?) first encounter with the Mane 6. Sure he's (she's?) surely shocked and confused, but that was probably uncalled for.

Then again, who's to say how I would react were I transformed into a pony...

9/10.

Thank you very much! I made anon quite vulgar to try and convey that he is fazed by this, and does not know how to react. Being vulgar also builds up a sense of Anon trying to act tough and macho, which will contrast with how he is presented in chapters 4 and 5.

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Post by WhatDoesThePendantDo? Thu Jul 12, 2012 2:21 am

Hey, sorry for the slight delay. I'm to chapter 4. I'll give you a full review once I'm through, most likely through PMs.

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Post by Wade_Wilson Thu Jul 12, 2012 2:24 am

Ok then, cheers. By the way, where is everyone? This thread isn't getting any love.

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Post by WhatDoesThePendantDo? Thu Jul 12, 2012 2:27 am

Who knows? We can try to keep it alive as best as we can, but I imagine everyone's on hold until Season 3.

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Post by Quarik Thu Jul 12, 2012 3:30 am

I've paused my fic reading in recent nostalgia for Death Note and Durarara.

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Post by Servant of Priscilla Thu Jul 12, 2012 11:25 am

Quarik wrote:I've paused my fic reading in recent nostalgia for Death Note and Durarara.

^^ agreed

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Quarik wrote:I've paused my fic reading in recent nostalgia for Death Note and Durarara.

You should at least give Wade's fic a quick looksy, if only to lend your support to your fellow forumnite.

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Post by Quarik Thu Jul 12, 2012 11:51 am

I will at some point. It's one of the 20 million tabs I have open with stuff to do on them.

Also, I just noticed this but your sig is very reminiscent of the Space Core.

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Post by Reaperfan Thu Jul 12, 2012 11:53 am

WhatDoesThePendantDo? wrote:Who knows? We can try to keep it alive as best as we can, but I imagine everyone's on hold until Season 3.

Spoiler:

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Quarik wrote:Also, I just noticed this but your sig is very reminiscent of the Space Core.

lol.

I can kind of see that. lol

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Post by Wade_Wilson Thu Jul 12, 2012 3:33 pm

I have done it1 I have combined the powers of Wade Wilson aka Deadpool, master mercenary and 100% insane, and Rainbow Dash, fastest Pegasus in Equestria (and best pony), into one awesome avatar!

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Post by GkMrBane Thu Jul 12, 2012 4:14 pm

ALL!!! HAIL!!!! RAINBOW POOL!!!!!!!!

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Post by Quarik Thu Jul 12, 2012 4:21 pm

Rain Pool, Rainbow Pool, or Rainpool?

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Post by Wade_Wilson Thu Jul 12, 2012 4:25 pm

Rainbow Pool. Aw shiza, I had an idea for writing for a short story. Rainbow Dash decides to become a mercenary and hilarity ensues.

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Wade_Wilson wrote:I have done it1 I have combined the powers of Wade Wilson aka Deadpool, master mercenary and 100% insane, and Rainbow Dash, fastest Pegasus in Equestria (and best pony), into one awesome avatar!

Oh....., so that's what that is. silly

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Post by Quarik Thu Jul 12, 2012 4:33 pm

Wade_Wilson wrote:Rainbow Pool. Aw shiza, I had an idea for writing for a short story. Rainbow Dash decides to become a mercenary and hilarity ensues.

It has potential... Make it so!

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Quarik wrote:

Wade_Wilson wrote:Rainbow Pool. Aw shiza, I had an idea for writing for a short story. Rainbow Dash decides to become a mercenary and hilarity ensues.

It has potential... Make it so!

I'm seriously going to write this once I've worked on my other two projects. It'd probably work better as a one-shot or mini story, not a long series.

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Post by Wade_Wilson Thu Jul 12, 2012 5:23 pm

I miss DarkxLord. He was a pretty cool guy.

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Wade_Wilson wrote:I miss DarkxLord. He was a pretty cool guy.

The first page of this thread will live on in his memory. Prayer

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WhatDoesThePendantDo? wrote:

Wade_Wilson wrote:I miss DarkxLord. He was a pretty cool guy.

The first page of this thread will live on in his memory.

A moment of silence as we honour the enemy dead. Prayer