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Federally- Chosen Undead
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Lol thanks cloud
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Dante (Darkstalker (non rp wise he is a lifehunter as well))
Dante's story is not an epic one like the children's story's and the legends, he was not a dragon slayer, or a demon hunter, Or a paladin. but he always dreamed of doing something important with his life instead of living a secluded life at the college in Vinheim. On a cold night, he left without a word, only bringing along his robes and his dagger his father left him. this dagger seemed to have an unholy essence to it, and seemed very sharp, too sharp for a regular knife. when he arrived in Astora, the land of faithful warriors. he decided to start training as a warrior, and fight for astora's holy name as a knight, his training did not go well, he could barely lift a sword let alone walk in his armor. after his failure he decided to study the artifact his father left him, the strange dagger. he knew it was unholy. because if there was anything he learned back in his class to become a knight, it was to tell the difference between what is wrong, and what is right. this dagger surely had an evil to it, so he went to someone of the legends, who may know about the dagger, the one source of evil in this land... the primordial serpent kaathe, he was shocked when the boy revealed the dagger to him, surprisingly telling the truth he told the boy that, that dagger he possessed belonged to Priscilla, queen of the Lifehunters. but kaathe warned him of the dangers of going to her domain, the Lifehunters would shed no mercy to trespassers of their sacred world. he offered him immortality so he may go to priscilla seeking answers about his father, foolishly he accepted not knowing what he was getting into and became a darkstalker, now he resides as a lost spirit in the painted world, an evil spirit who kills all he sees, for that is all he knows. he wields the a spiritual version of the lifehunte scythe as it is bound to his soul, and his soul is bound to the pained world, forever wandering until he has collected enough humanity to become human again, just for kaathe to steal it from him.
(a bit long ik, i could've cut ALOT from it. but im tired so i dont really care *shrug*. oh well hehe there you go i guess. ill turn on edit mode in the morining.)
Dante's story is not an epic one like the children's story's and the legends, he was not a dragon slayer, or a demon hunter, Or a paladin. but he always dreamed of doing something important with his life instead of living a secluded life at the college in Vinheim. On a cold night, he left without a word, only bringing along his robes and his dagger his father left him. this dagger seemed to have an unholy essence to it, and seemed very sharp, too sharp for a regular knife. when he arrived in Astora, the land of faithful warriors. he decided to start training as a warrior, and fight for astora's holy name as a knight, his training did not go well, he could barely lift a sword let alone walk in his armor. after his failure he decided to study the artifact his father left him, the strange dagger. he knew it was unholy. because if there was anything he learned back in his class to become a knight, it was to tell the difference between what is wrong, and what is right. this dagger surely had an evil to it, so he went to someone of the legends, who may know about the dagger, the one source of evil in this land... the primordial serpent kaathe, he was shocked when the boy revealed the dagger to him, surprisingly telling the truth he told the boy that, that dagger he possessed belonged to Priscilla, queen of the Lifehunters. but kaathe warned him of the dangers of going to her domain, the Lifehunters would shed no mercy to trespassers of their sacred world. he offered him immortality so he may go to priscilla seeking answers about his father, foolishly he accepted not knowing what he was getting into and became a darkstalker, now he resides as a lost spirit in the painted world, an evil spirit who kills all he sees, for that is all he knows. he wields the a spiritual version of the lifehunte scythe as it is bound to his soul, and his soul is bound to the pained world, forever wandering until he has collected enough humanity to become human again, just for kaathe to steal it from him.
(a bit long ik, i could've cut ALOT from it. but im tired so i dont really care *shrug*. oh well hehe there you go i guess. ill turn on edit mode in the morining.)
ViralEnsign_- Lordvessel
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Okay so I have Kirito's bio here
Name: Kirito Fujibayashi
Age: 23
Lore: Kirito came out of the east some years before he ever came to Lordran serving in the Astoran campaign as a swordsman and de facto captain of a brigade. After the campaign he left with a band of close friends and allies who ended up acting as escorts and selective mercenaries in Eos. However after the deaths of two of his closest friends Kirito and the remaining five members parted ways amidst accusations of treachery, greed, and negligence.
Two years later Kirito would find that the remaining members of his group would meet again in Lordran. As of yet Kirito has not been able to find them, not even knowing which members survived, or even if any had at all.
However unbeknownst to him a member waits anxiously for his arrivial.
Name: Kirito Fujibayashi
Age: 23
Lore: Kirito came out of the east some years before he ever came to Lordran serving in the Astoran campaign as a swordsman and de facto captain of a brigade. After the campaign he left with a band of close friends and allies who ended up acting as escorts and selective mercenaries in Eos. However after the deaths of two of his closest friends Kirito and the remaining five members parted ways amidst accusations of treachery, greed, and negligence.
Two years later Kirito would find that the remaining members of his group would meet again in Lordran. As of yet Kirito has not been able to find them, not even knowing which members survived, or even if any had at all.
However unbeknownst to him a member waits anxiously for his arrivial.
Federally- Chosen Undead
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Kirito is unaffiliated?
Federally- Chosen Undead
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Adding Dante now, guys should I add the forum name to the character's link so everyone can see who owns which character from the list?
RaynexFall- Obsessed
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only if you feel that would make it easier for someone. as that puts extra work on you. so go ahead if you feel the need.
DoughGuy- Duke's Archivist
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They can find out whose toon it is when they click the link.
Federally- Chosen Undead
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Wilki I wouldn't say Dante's is long, I like the concept and would love to see it written in more detail
Good point Doughy
Good point Doughy
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ViralEnsign_- Lordvessel
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Federally wrote:Kirito is unaffiliated?
Very much so
Federally- Chosen Undead
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Okay Kirito is added.
I believe we have quite an impressive collection of writing here.
I believe we have quite an impressive collection of writing here.
DoughGuy- Duke's Archivist
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For now 8)
DoughGuy- Duke's Archivist
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Dammit Fed!
That for now was @Viral.
That for now was @Viral.
Federally- Chosen Undead
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I ruin everything
Side note, get on Skype when you can I need to pick your brain.
Side note, get on Skype when you can I need to pick your brain.
DoughGuy- Duke's Archivist
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Ill be home in about 20 minutes. I dont want to sign on on my laptop and have to go through all the new messages twice.
ViralEnsign_- Lordvessel
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Lol I will up Kirito's tale when more of it unfolds.
Also Letos, Yvette, Avrik, and Rone will be incoming soon after the Painted War Lore....
Also Letos, Yvette, Avrik, and Rone will be incoming soon after the Painted War Lore....
Federally- Chosen Undead
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This news excites me
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.....I'll bet
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The Hand of the Queen:
He is a very honorable man, he prefers dueling, so he gravelords. He likes to spread misery at the Painted World, hoping that the black phantoms devour the trapped souls. He also like to invade as Darkmoon, hunting sinners trying to kill our Queen. He is a very skillful fighter, not easily toppled.
He wears the Xanthous Crown, in honor of King Jeremiah, an Eastern Armor and Ornstein's leggings, representing his high position in the small council of the Lifehunters. His favorite weapons include the katanas, the Great Scythe and the Server. He like the power of the Chaos Flame, and the toxic power of Nito.
More to come....maybe.
He is a very honorable man, he prefers dueling, so he gravelords. He likes to spread misery at the Painted World, hoping that the black phantoms devour the trapped souls. He also like to invade as Darkmoon, hunting sinners trying to kill our Queen. He is a very skillful fighter, not easily toppled.
He wears the Xanthous Crown, in honor of King Jeremiah, an Eastern Armor and Ornstein's leggings, representing his high position in the small council of the Lifehunters. His favorite weapons include the katanas, the Great Scythe and the Server. He like the power of the Chaos Flame, and the toxic power of Nito.
More to come....maybe.
Federally- Chosen Undead
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You're added Wyrm
Forum Pirate- Chosen Undead
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Fixed.Federally wrote:Forum I'll add you to the OP right now, however there is a bit of a jumble of words in Etraiu's second paragraph, "Overly sarcastic when obvious or stupteachanr he fe,when or(in his mind)" I believe you'll want to clean that up. Since they're in the same post I'll link them as a pair.
Side note, I like your characters
Glad you two like them.
As I've mentioned before, I feel creating people and places is my strongest point in writing, but I can't be sure any of its actually any good without feedback, so both getting feedback and it being positive feels awesome.
Federally- Chosen Undead
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Forum Pirate wrote:Fixed.Federally wrote:Forum I'll add you to the OP right now, however there is a bit of a jumble of words in Etraiu's second paragraph, "Overly sarcastic when obvious or stupteachanr he fe,when or(in his mind)" I believe you'll want to clean that up. Since they're in the same post I'll link them as a pair.
Side note, I like your characters
Glad you two like them.
As I've mentioned before, I feel creating people and places is my strongest point in writing, but I can't be sure any of its actually any good without feedback, so both getting feedback and it being positive feels awesome.
Well now I just need to read you actually writing the characters into something, I've only seen them appear in Viral's writing and while he does a fine job I'd like to see them written by their creator
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Thats where I fall short. I haven't figured out how to write in an engaging manner. My stories read more like textbooks than novels.
I have the odd couple in the old painted world war thread, if you're interested in examples of just about the best I can do. Its not bad, its just not good either.
I have the odd couple in the old painted world war thread, if you're interested in examples of just about the best I can do. Its not bad, its just not good either.
Federally- Chosen Undead
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I had the same problem when I first started. My writing read like someone was telling you what happened in something they read lol. Best I can suggest is simply trying more and using a better process. Lay out your outline of events, then start filling in and adding more detail and do a couple drafts. Just by using a better process and approach to my writing it's improved a lot.
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I'll have to research one, because I do everything in a cause/effect way. I don't decide events, the settings and characters do.